• DON'T be too wordy
A lot of times the thing you’re trying to say can be expressed in WAY fewer words. Try to think of it from the reader’s perspective, would you want to read an 1100 word essay in an annotation?
This one, however, is too wordy. It reiterates itself and makes a statement with too many words.
In the same regard, DON’T just jack whole pages from wikipedia. Change it up into your own words or relate it to the lyric. Just because the lyric mentions Mars, doesn’t mean that the entire history of Mars is relevant to the lyric.
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