Please review this track

I have not sent this yet to be mixed or headed to the studio for it but want it to be reviewed trying a new flow and shit
https://soundcloud.com/lsom-1/fwtm-full

July 13th, 2013
C_Goomba's photo

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I fucks with it, it has potential to be a dope track with good mixing. I automatically was reminded of SlimKid 3 from The Pharcyde on Otha Fish when you starting vocalizing.

I suggest adding adlibs throughout the song. A couple of punch-ins will really help you out because you started out strong but towards the end you began rapping normally and sounded you were almost out of breath. So yea. Ad-libs and punch-ins as well as great mixing and I think this will be a track I will really look forward to listening to when complete.

July 13th, 2013
Cabose's photo

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Thought of this right away. Not bad.

July 13th, 2013

Your voice is too boring, make it more energetic, you got a great song!

July 13th, 2013

Thanks I feel you on the voice and @Cabose my parents play alot of haitian music which kinda inspired the flow but I kinda see what your saying though

July 13th, 2013
Izuna's photo

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Great song. Your voice sounds like you’re reading though.

You need to rehearse this song a hundred times until you can spit it off head and then record it off head as if you’re speaking to a crowd naturally so it sounds energetic and fluid.

July 13th, 2013

I like it bruh. I say keep the same tune of your raps, but like others said, more confidence in what you’re saying. Let us believe you man!

July 13th, 2013
Fresh Air's photo

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To be honest, u dont have to do it off the head, but it helps if u can do most of it off the top if u needed to

July 13th, 2013