Custructive Cryticism! (Back to The Forum)

please check out this track i made,and tell me what you think,i would really appreciate that :)

new shit :) tell me what u think :) http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ku-D9F9hjF0&feature=youtu.be

Great stuff! Reminded me of some dope 90’s underground joint. I actually bobbed my head haha. The only part I would change is the chorus, but I guess it works in a way though. Great job anyways, and definitely don’t quit! You’re still young and you do have talent

thanks man,im glad you liked it, and dont worry i wont quit,i got too much passion for this :)

Beats dope, not really feeling the the hook though.

thanks,and yea true,i need to still practice on my hooks,i havent done much of them yet

Yo homie you definitely have some technical skills!…i just might take some offense to the “name a 15 year old on the same level as me” line lol…good work…but yea that chorus wasnt the best…but everything else was dope

thanks homie

IT’S SPELLED CRITICISM.

NAW, BUT FOR REAL, IT WASN’T WHACK, BUT IT DIDN’T STAND OUT PLUS YOUR VOICE IS KIND OF ANNOYING.

i spelled it right haha^ but yh,thanks? i guess

anyone else wants to give their opinions? :P

I’m willing to bet you love the album Infinite

why do you think that? haha,i like that album,illmatic is my favourite album of all time though

just a really similar sound

oh right,well when eminem made that album,he was really influenced by nas and az,and so am i,so i guess thats why :P

here’s my criticism:

didn’t stand out for me, the first 2 bars have to capture the listeners attention then once its held they’ll be trying to decipher that bar and then you hit them with another 2 bars straight after. make sure the first 4 bars are solid punchlines (in my opinion, this is coming from someone incredibly picky). work on your voice as well, you’re either a foreigner trying to imitate an American “Infinite?” accent is sounds like or you’re an American whose become influenced to the point of biting. (tbh the entire song sounds like “It’s Okay” by Em. Also, the rhyming comes across as forced a lot. Being lyrical is dope, but then combine it with punchlines or intricate metaphors that’ll stand out and stick in the heads of listeners. If you ask me, don’t mention your age, coz no one actually cares for age. You’re either dope or not.I’m not gunna listen to a 13 year old rapper for the sake of listening to a 13 year old rapper who can hopefully progress in time. And don’t upload songs yet if you haven’t found your style, it can be off-putting, to me, knowing that you weren’t this dope to begin with. Also, you’re 15, do you actually smoke a lot? or is that because of the illmatic influence?

well,do i sound like a foreigner? and,no i dont smoke,i only smoke weed sometimes

You produce your own shit?

nope,i mean ive just recently started to make my own beats, but this is an instrumental i found on the internet

@casMarlow,check this out,tell me what you think,im at 1:37 http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xRj80oYspQU

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Okay I listened to the song, the first 2 rappers were fucken terrible. You were decent but not decent enough for me to come back to, know what I’m saying? You still sound like you’re developing your style. Don’t take this the wrong way, but don’t upload songs until you’re solid with your style. You don’t need to be famous as a teenager, life doesn’t begin and end with fame. Rather find your voice first and then release songs. You’ve got the rhyming down, like you clearly spend a lot of time rhyming words, but that’s not gunna cut it because you still need to learn how to construct songs that’ll engage a crowd so you can gain fans. People won’t be interested or come back if they hear you and they don’t think it’s tight, there are many musicians out there that people can choose from and if you expect people to just blindly follow you until you’re dope then you’re mistake. You definitely outshined all the others on this track, so that’s a plus for you, but yeah, practice more before you go out and release songs. Because you remind me of Eminem when I listen to you, and if there’s one thing I hate, it’s thinking of other rappers while I listen to a rapper. People aren’t interested in hearing another Em or Nas or GZA because there’s already one and you’ll get shunned the fuck out if you entire a battle and you sound like Em. So find your style first and keep practising. Finding a solid style comes easier to others, like Nas had his style pinned down when he was only 17-18 and Eminem only found his style when he was in his early to mid-20s. You see the point?

yea,thanks,im not trying to be famous,im uploading my songs,cause people enjoy em,and i like to get feedback from people to improve,and yh,ill be experimenting with alot of stuff,so i can find my style,thanks.

message me when you release a new track so i can see how you’ve progressed

yea,ok,thanks,btw,have u only listend to only first verse to success,cause i know my 1st verse was not good,but my 2nd verse and 3rd verse were much better,and had alot of puchlines and wordplay