Rapper/singers give me your best song

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I know there’s a lot of folks on here who critique and breakdown rap, but who’s doing it themselves? Show me your best song, easy promo and you’ll get some feedback. Go!

I’ll put mine up later.

November 8th, 2012
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November 8th, 2012
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http://rapgenius.com/discussions/13774-Isaiah-g-celebrates-the-presidential-victory-new-song

algernon links to a dope song in that thread too, check those out

November 8th, 2012
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@DeLaNoise the sample is dope, love the boondocks. The song overall is iight, the beat was something different which is good had a more fun feel to it. I think your vocals could be turned downed a little. Your flow isn’t bad, it’s solid the whole way though, but I would have liked to see some variation though. The thing that stood out the most about this was sound effects in the background, which means you got to hit me with some crazier wordplay, the metaphors were just iight, could use some work. I’m glad you didn’t drag it out to three minutes, but something by way of a hook or bridge to start it with then close it with would have been nice being that it’s an original/non-mainstream beat. I feel like you can and will make better songs then this is you haven’t already.

November 8th, 2012

Rukan has everybody covered

November 8th, 2012
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@rukan23, this song is nasty. Right off the bat, it’s an excellent beat choice for the subject matter. You flowed it almost perfectly, just enough variation that it kept you interested without losing you. Wasn’t looking for a lot of wordplay on this, but you had just enough with a good message. Tell Isaiah this was dope.

November 8th, 2012
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@rukan23, you rap? And I couldn’t take it serious from the start, and the mixing needs a little work. Kevin’s flow was kind of basic, it was iight though. Algernon needs to work on the steadiness of his flow and again they deff got to work on the mixing. The rhymes schemes are pretty good and what they’re saying is okay. The samples used were dope. Nigel was extra white lol, but nonetheless this is or seems like a joke around sound so i’m not taking it as seriously their best work.

November 8th, 2012

My album’s still be mixed and its taking foreverrrr cause out producers works full time and goes to school. Best song I have written hasn’t been recorded yet tho, and is about how much I suck and should probably stop rapping. I kill it on that shit.

November 8th, 2012
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Well when you have something to post, you deff should, i’m always looking for new stuff for the iPod.

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November 8th, 2012
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I attempted to make a thought-provoking track disguised as a “banger”. I made this instrumental as well. I appreciate your willingness to give feedback good sir!
(The lyrics are on my profile too.)

http://soundcloud.com/killerintellect/realist-preview-from

(This is not mixed as well as i’d like.)

November 8th, 2012
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@product professional recording would help a great deal. Also when you are recording keep the background noise out unless it’s significant to the song (the cell phone ring in the beginning). The story telling aspect of the song is good. You had a little trouble with the flow in the beginning, but you got it under control. One of the bigger things i find would be you filling up the bars. You used repetition of words at the end of bars to fill space, but it would have been better to let the beat ride for that. I would love to see if you could carry out a full three verse song. One more thing don’t just cut the beat at the end, make sure you fade it out because that abrupt ending, doesn’t sit well.
This is just me, but whatever program your working with to record should have some effects and plug-ins that you could use to better mix it down. But keep it up, it has potential.

November 8th, 2012

A track off of my latest mixtape THORS DAY (2012)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FbmQUpnZN1g

November 8th, 2012

This ones more professional I recorded in the studio http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Xzrcleo5gcM&feature=youtube_gdata_player

November 8th, 2012

i rap and produce. im still developing my sound so criticize away
http://soundcloud.com/bleachstain/im-not-a-rapper

November 8th, 2012